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Source text in English

Sunday Mornin' Comin' Down

Well, I woke up Sunday morning
With no way to hold my head that didn't hurt.
And the beer I had for breakfast wasn't bad,
So I had one more for dessert.
Then I fumbled in my closet through my clothes
And found my cleanest dirty shirt.
Then I washed my face and combed my hair
And stumbled down the stairs to meet the day.

I'd smoked my mind the night before
With cigarettes and songs I'd been picking.
But I lit my first and watched a small kid
Playing with a can that he was kicking.
Then I walked across the street
And caught the Sunday smell of someone's frying chicken.
And Lord, it took me back to something that I'd lost
Somewhere, somehow along the way.

On a Sunday morning sidewalk,
I'm wishing, Lord, that I was stoned.
'Cause there's something in a Sunday
That makes a body feel alone.
And there's nothing short a' dying
That's half as lonesome as the sound
Of the sleeping city sidewalk
And Sunday morning coming down.

In the park I saw a daddy
With a laughing little girl that he was swinging.
And I stopped beside a Sunday school
And listened to the songs they were singing.
Then I headed down the street,
And somewhere far away a lonely bell was ringing,
And it echoed through the canyon
Like the disappearing dreams of yesterday.

On a Sunday morning sidewalk,
I'm wishing, Lord, that I was stoned.
'Cause there's something in a Sunday
That makes a body feel alone.
And there's nothing short a' dying
That's half as lonesome as the sound
Of the sleeping city sidewalk
And Sunday morning coming down.

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Source text segment #4

I'd smoked my mind the night before
With cigarettes and songs I'd been picking.
But I lit my first and watched a small kid
Playing with a can that he was kicking.
Rank by:
+10
picking : Johnny Cash played guitar, so it could be a reference to guitar picking as well...
+4
I meant Kris Kristofferson....
+1
Anoche colme mi mente del humo
de cigarrillos y de canciones punteadas.
Igual ya encendí el primero mientras
miraba a un pequeño que una lata pateaba.
Like Kris in English ending in "..in", these lines end in "..adas and ..aba"

In der Nacht zuvor betäubte ich meinen Geist mit Zigaretten und von mir ausgesuchten Liedern.Aber als ich die erste anzündete, sah ich ein kleines, spielendes Kind mit einer Dose, die es trat.
Me habia fumado my mente anoche con cigarros y canciones que habia estado seleccionando. Pero al prender el primero vi a un niño jugando con una lata que la estaba pateando
Había fumado mi mente la noche pasada Con cigarrillos y canciones que hube estado seleccionando. Pero encendí mi primero y observé un niñito Jugando con una lata que el estaba pateando.
Σαν καπνό είχα κάνει το μυαλό μου ψες
με τσιγάρα και τραγούδια διαλεκτά μου.
Αλλ' άναψα το πρώτο μου και έβλεπα ένα παιδάκι
που έπαιζε κλοτσώ
Noć prije mozak sam napušio
cigaretama i pjesmama koje sam si birao.
Al' zapalih prvu pa dječaka u igri ugledah -
limenku je našutavao.

Translations of this segment (10 total; 10 unique)

夕べのタバコと聴いてた曲のせいで ぼーっとしてるって言うのに 今日の一本目に火を点けて 缶蹴で遊ぶ子供を見つめるんだ
吸いすぎた煙草と弾きまくった曲のせいで 夕べは芯まで煙づけ。 それでも最初の一服に火をつけて子供を目で追った 缶を蹴って遊んでいる男の子を
昨夜は煙草と爪弾く歌で 心をいぶしたけれど 一本目に火を点け 缶蹴り遊ぶ少年を見る
昨夜は煙草と自分が選んだ歌で 心まで紫煙で燻してしまった。 でもまた、今朝の最初の1本に火を着け、 小さな子どもが缶けり遊びをするのをじっと見ている
ゆうべは夜通しふかし続けた 頭にあるのはタバコと俺が選んだ歌のことだけ だけど最初の一本に火をつけて なぜか見えたのは缶けりに夢中の小さな子供
昨夜は好みのタバコと曲で もくもく頭を燻してたけど 朝イチのやつに火をつけてみりゃ 子供が缶蹴りをして、遊んでる
昨夜はタバコをふかしながら曲をやり 心の中までもやもやしている だが　まずはタバコに火を点け カン蹴りしている幼い子に目をやった
僕の心は昨夜燃やしてしまった タバコと弾き語った歌によって 火をつけて、子供を見た 子供は空き缶を蹴って遊んでた
前の晩にはタバコやギターで 心をしずめたけど 今朝　一本目に火をつけて 缶蹴り遊びする子どもを眺めた
昨夜はタバコの煙と演奏した歌で心は満杯だった。 だけどまず子供が缶けりするのを見て心が明るくなった
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